Cinquain
This was a little harder than I thought so here it goes. Please let me know what you think.
Walking
Slowly steadily
Down the aisle
Toward my true love
And true love's first kiss
Singing
Sweetly softly
Praises to Him
Who brings me Hope
For He is the Lord
posted by Tami @ 4:36 PM
3 comments
3 Comments:
These are beautiful cinquains. The language you use is so powerful. My only comment about form is that the book says that each line should increase in syllables. You go from "Slowly steadily" which is five syllables to "Down the aisle" which is only four. I hope this helps!
Nice. I think you followed the form correctly, but I agree with Shae. The syllables should increase as you go on through the lines.
Thanks for the input. I'll see if I can revise the syllable part.
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