Writing Commons One: Cinquain

Saturday, May 03, 2008

Moving

Away
From Oregon
The third week in June
To live in the real world
When we have passed all the exams

At 1:11 PM, Hillary said...: I think this is a great example of a Cinquain! I wish I was as creative as you are. I would like to give you some constructive criticism but I wouldn't know what to tell you needed to be fixed. It looks great!
At 8:55 PM, Carolyn said...: Wow, I like your cinquain a lot. It sums up the huge step of entering the world after graduation in a succint manner. I think the fact that it is said in as little words as possible adds to it being more profound and powerful. It also leaves you wanting answers like, where are you headed? and what will you be doing? I like that you took a big concept and simplified it down to still hold a lot of meaning and emotion with the pure facts.
At 12:54 PM, Tami said...: Agreed! Your cinquain is very creative and well done. Good analysis Carolyn, I felt the same way about the content and manner caught in just a few words.
At 8:03 PM, Shae said...: I enjoyed reading your cinquain. This style really works for what you are trying to say. I agree that using such few words to describe such a huge step makes it very powerful.
At 10:23 PM, Alex said...: I like your cinquain and agree with the other comments. I actually read yours before I wrote mine to see an example of how they should be done. So, thanks for the help!