Sacrificing
There
In the nest
To feed their fragile young
Every hour of the bright daylight
Because they know of of nothing else but self-sacrifice.
Sacrificing (Title)
There (adverb)
In the nest (prepositional phrase)
To feed their fragile young (verb phrase)
Every hour of the bright daylight (noun phrase)
Because they know nothing else but self-sacrifice (clause)
posted by Jason @ 7:35 AM
4 comments
4 Comments:
I enjoyed your cinquain. There are baby birds living in one of the walls of our house, and this reminded me of them. :) I like starting with "there," as it seems like someone pointing something out and drawing attention to "in the nest."
That's a really nice cinquain! I like how your clause kind of ties it all back to your title.
It is interesting how the adverb is "there" because the title is something that is really intangible. To me it means: "Hey, Max, look over there, it's sacrificing" but I look over and all I see is some bird vomiting into its young's mouth.
It's very poetic, is what I'm saying.
I think the infinitive verb form to kick off the third line is pretty creative, for some reason. It makes the transition from the title to the third line ... I can't think of a better word than poetic, and Max already used it.
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