sin-kwain
Dancing
there
for hours
nary a shoe
on either stout foot
I wish I knew all the steps.
Dancing (verb+ -ing)
adverb of place
prepositional phrase
noun phrase
verb phrase
clause
posted by jeremytd @ 10:36 PM
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4 Comments:
This was a fun one to read. I don't think the word "nary" is used nearly as much as it ought to be nowadays. :)
I liked your cinquain, but I'm not sure if your verb phrase works. It seems more like a prepositional phrase to me.
That's pretty easily remedied though. It seems you wanted to give the shoe some sort of action, i.e. is on either stout foot .
Now you get to come up with a fun verb though. Here are my recommendations for what the shoe can be doing:
to cling to either stout foot
to weather the steps of either stout foot
to shine beneath the dance hall lights
It's nice to read a poem that expands ones vocabulary. There verb phrase also seems like a prepositional phrase.
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