Aren't cinquains fun?
Happily
For our special day
Our closest friends nearby
To witness our happiness
When we exchange our wedding vows
Planning (verb + -ing)
Happily (adverb of manner, 3 syllables)
For our special day (prep. phrase, 5 syllables)
Our closest friends nearby (noun phrase, 6 syllables)
To witness our happiness (infinitive verb phrase, 7 syllables)
When we exchange our wedding vows (adverbial clause, 8 syllables)
posted by Jenni @ 11:25 PM
5 comments
5 Comments:
I felt like my cinquain was rather choppy. I like how closely in numbers the syllables in your cinquain progress. Seems to flow well and have a whimsical quality to it. :)
The pyramid structure of this cinquain makes it flow very nicely. On an ironic note, I saw you and your man (I assume) walking around on Sunday, I think. Maybe Monday.
I liked the syllable arrangement. It made the whole poem focus on the moment of the e=wedding and nothing else.
I have to disagree with Miss Marjie. I like the poetic flow of your cinquain.
It seems like the most successful Cinquains have some kind of link from one line to the next that helps it feel less stilted.
Here the link is from the noun phrase to the verb phrase: "Our closest friends nearby, to witness our happiness" since it can be seen as one complete sentence. Very cool.
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